So thanks to ![[profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png)
udonman's suggestion I have another line for that poem; for now it is:
knight faces knight/across the bloody field
eyes locked upon/that blade the other'd wield
I don't think I will find, when my research continues, that this is fitting the form of the sonnet I had originally hoped to weave. So now it is likely to be a poem of a structure invented in the writing.
The forward slash originally was meant to signify a break between lines. Now it has evolved to be a feature in the middle of each line. With the language used already it looks best to continue in a style I shall - without education to know the proper terms - label as epic and declamatory. I think also that the rhyme must change after this couplet, which is looking more and more like the beginning and not part of the first third as I thought, but there will probably be good cause to echo it later.
And now, with the vague shape of the next line percolating at the back of my mind, it is off to sleep.
udonman's suggestion I have another line for that poem; for now it is:knight faces knight/across the bloody field
eyes locked upon/that blade the other'd wield
I don't think I will find, when my research continues, that this is fitting the form of the sonnet I had originally hoped to weave. So now it is likely to be a poem of a structure invented in the writing.
The forward slash originally was meant to signify a break between lines. Now it has evolved to be a feature in the middle of each line. With the language used already it looks best to continue in a style I shall - without education to know the proper terms - label as epic and declamatory. I think also that the rhyme must change after this couplet, which is looking more and more like the beginning and not part of the first third as I thought, but there will probably be good cause to echo it later.
And now, with the vague shape of the next line percolating at the back of my mind, it is off to sleep.
